Path of life
PC: Mi Young Lee
…and when the cassette began to rewind -
I looked at what I earned and lost on my way.
The reel showed a vibrant
mosaic of colours;
a patch of happy as well
as bad times.
No turns, no ups, nor downs but straight,
I assessed the path of my emotional life.
All the grouch seems
useless now,
time had been kind and
always on my side.
With every dark patch it offered a light zone,
And all through with love and support of the own…
In response to Susie's "Bits of imagination" at IGWRT.
This is so interesting - you've seen emotions in the image while I've seen a landscape! I like the way your poem beings - as a continuation of something unknown to the reader. I like the lines:
ReplyDelete'a patch of happy as well as bad times.
No turns, no ups, nor downs but straight'
and the final rhyming couplet sums it up nicely.
I had two minds while writing this as I had seen a city as well. But honestly, I did not understand how and what to write wrt landscape. emotions is easy for me I suppose, thus...!
DeleteThanks for you lovely comment :)
I like the way you have used it as a detailed metaphor for your feelings, and that the poem could stand alone without the painting.
ReplyDeleteThat's such a kind appreciation, thank you <3
Delete"a patch of happy as well as bad times."
ReplyDeletestriking ekphrastic phrase
much love...
Thanks dear Gillena :)
DeleteSuch striking use of metaphors here, Vijita :D Beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sanaa :)
DeleteLoved the way you looked at the life so far....beautifully written...and life is beautiful!
ReplyDeleteyup! colourful and beautiful :) <3
DeleteA cassette? Wow.
ReplyDeleteYa, the top right corner image is like that of the old video cassette... That's how i see it...
DeleteI liked that idea too... Hehe...
Glad you liked it :)
Nice, so colorful.
ReplyDeleteThanks. Hoping to have done justice to the colourful soulful painting...
DeleteI so love how you saw your life in the image. "All the grouch seems useless now," - So true, bitter seeds bitter. Fabulous writing! Thanks so much for writing for the prompt!!
ReplyDeleteThank you :) for the comment as well as such a lovely prompt.
DeleteI like that you saw a VHS tape in this, the rewinding of life. Nice.
ReplyDeleteThanks De! :)
DeleteNice journey through life and the dance of the dark with the light.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Paul :)
DeleteAll the grouch seems useless now,
ReplyDeletetime had been kind and always on my side
Time is a good ally to resolve little snags. One often wonders how distractions may develop into bigger things unwittingly!
Hank
True!
Deletetime heals everything, but it's important to wait for time... that's where we often fail...
On the average then, pleasant emotions won out. At first I thought this might be an assessment of wealth collection. I do not see what is coming from the end break, a continuance? It's a great way to make a rhyme with 'zone but then there are no other rhymes.
ReplyDeleteA very good read, clever subject matter pick.
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There's nothing much to say about the rhyme, Jim... It just occurred to me then.. I simply wanted to put across that in bad times, much support is often offered by near and dear ones making life better and easy..
DeleteThanks, glad you like the topic :)
I love your interpretation of this painting. An unwinding reel of life.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Sara :)
DeleteWonderful interplay of shadow and light; of life and meaning.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot! you seem to have interpreted my thoughts better in this comment :D :D
DeleteLove.